1
07
2008
You and I are in a rip.
It was on a video clip.
We made it out alive.
All the lifeguards are about to arrive.
While Justin’s eaten by a shark.
All the dogs now bark.
Mrs Pericles saw a Mermaid.
Then she fainted and we call the first aid.
And orcas are chasing humpbacks.
Now bring all your backpacks.
It’s time to look for dolphins.
And bring your lunch in tins.
But look we found a pirate.
Also his name is Tate.
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Hey Deon,
i thought about the poem and thought tat some one helped you.Did any body help you???
Bye
Hello Deon
I like you’re poem it is very funny and I found it really exiting.
I agree with Katherine did anyone help you with it?
Hope to see more posts on your bloging in the future
Bye, Lilly
Hi Deon,
Great rhyming! I hope that Justin wasn’t really eaten by a shark, poor Justin!
Mermaids are Mrs P’s thing aren’t they!
I hope the pirate isn’t mean like the pirate in my reading circle book!
Naomi
Hey Deon
I really enjoyed your ocean poem and it was so funny that I laughed for ages and I really liked it so I told my parents to they enjoyed it alot and as much as me
From Haley
hey Deon,
I’m evie but my nicknames evers dont have time to carry on soz
cyz evie (evers)