6
06
2008
Huffing &Puffing.
And our hearts are pumping.
We’ve made it to the zone.
Mum gave me a phone.
This time I am fighting.
Like thunder and lightning.
Push it to the limit.
Or grab a ball and go kick it.
You want to make it to the end.
Then stop talking with your friends.
With Hafiz coming 1st I always knew he would win.
Also Jayam wining would creep in my skin.
Michael coming 5th it’s a real big surprise.
And with the girls doing great and they really did rise.
So Haley came 8th now that’s a real good result.
Now William, Daniel and Issa did a real big result.
Plus I did well I came 26th and now I am happy.
So if you’re too scared go and wear a nappy.
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- Date : 6 June 2008
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Hi,
I really liked how you tried to make that rhyme and it was very funny because you put things that are just out of the ordinary into it to make it rhyme. I think that a poem or song always sounds better when it rhymes. In the first picture when all of you boys are crossing your arms hafiz sort of fades into the background and haley looks like he is going to puke but it actually looks really cool. I think that haley only looks like that because he was laughing and when he was in that posion Mrs.P took the photo and he never realised.
Well hope to talk to you soon!
Tooooooooooooooooooooooodles
Hi Deon,
great post you got and what place did you come in again?
also that post was about the crosss country and that sound freaky how you said the creeping, was scaring me out but any way good job on the cross country.
From: Katherine
Well done Deon on working hard and making it to the zone carnival.
You seem to enjoy writing poetry, I like the image of you fighting to finish the race like lightning - I picture you darting and surging through people as you make your way to the finish line.
Keep on writing
MrsP
Well done Deon you seem to be a fast runner from my point of view.Great job you got and by the way you are really i like the way you right poety its very good!
:)
Bye: Katherine